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your son is breaking. by ~iLISI:iconiLISI:



your son leans against the mailbox
to watch the tourists from the east
his eyes burn their backs as they go

he puts himself in space where he
does not belong, hatches chicks in
the sun to hear their tangled lullabies

your sun practices pirouettes and
there is something missing from
the circle of his fragile arms
©2009 ~iLISI
:iconilisi:

Author's Comments

he turned twenty more than a month ago
& i am late in all things
so here it is. a 3x3 with suns and sons and songs for him.

to robin, who is
talented & musical &
who told me to learn to play
guitar anyway & who lives far
enough away to put me
off the idea of birthday hugs.
= a poem instead,yes?

:iconr-mitchell:

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:iconnozomi-san:
beautiful.
you always have the perfect word usage, missy!
goddammitititittitiit!

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:iconposhlost:
I know you can't do the son/sun thing anymore, but you know what would be much more brilliant? A poem about daughters.

[link]

Thanks for writing,
J.

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"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:iconposhlost:
'Kay I read the author's comments too late. But. You should write a poem for daughters too, because they deserve it more.

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"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:iconlagioconda:
deserves to be read many times. i myself read it three.

inspired by st. robinson in his cadillac dream, by any chance?

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:iconilisi:
i love the son/sun thing (:
i think i've done it before though.
and i agree. daughters are seriously underrated in modern society.

i'll let the idea marinate for a day or two, see what my brain comes up with.
thanks for the article!

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let's play a game called you pretend i am an actual poet
:iconilisi:
i tried to make this one fit his 3x3 style
he has such a way of writing brief poems that use exactly the right words
i think sometimes i'm too longwinded
):

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let's play a game called you pretend i am an actual poet
:iconilisi:
thank you (:

no, i can't say i've listened to that song much.
but i'll give a listen now <3
this was actually inspired by a conversation i had with robin, on one of his poems (:

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let's play a game called you pretend i am an actual poet
:iconposhlost:
Not a problem. It has inspired me to write my own poem. I'll link you, see if it gets any more ideas flowing.

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"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:icongirlofgreys:
I love this! =)

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~Love is like a photograph...they both develop in darkness.~

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